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YT wouldn't let me leave comments, so I'll put them here. Love it! Great concept, great execution (as always!). My suggestions: make Mahan break out of the oval frame even more. Get that right shoulder way out, or stretch that arm to give it a little more urgency. Also, I'd drop the suggestion of a smile or mouth at all, just to see if that makes him a bit more otherworld-creepy. I like the vines idea to help with the framing.

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I did mention in the video and in the description that you cannot leave comments on YT-- ONLY here--so I have them all in one place. =)

That's not Mahan, BUT you bringing my main bad guy up makes me stop and consider! THANK you for that.

Love the 3D angle suggestions...and just FYI -- this was just a simple idea, so I could draw SOMEthing to show. Wendell, of course, has to be there, but my first thought was to have him turning to look AT the threat.

Agree and love also the urgency feel -- I do think it's critical to create the danger and stress of the moment.

...as for the 'smile'....I wanted to change it into a snarl...unless I can get the whole feel from the eyes themselves.

I'm struggling with the vines...because I want to create signs, symbols, maybe even easter eggs for readers to find,...or, aha -- maybe a cypher-- to find hidden parts within the storyline itself?

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Oh, the cypher idea is sweeeet!!!!

I like the idea of him turning to look at the threat, but then we might not get as good an angle on his face, and I feel like the MC's face should be the focal point, no?

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I agree -- Wendell should be the focal point.

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I don't have an artistic eye, but I loved it and can't wait to see what you do next!

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But you know what you LIKE, don't you? That's also what I'm after.

Is there a feeling you prefer? Maybe the way artwork and fonts "pull" at you?

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I've always been impressed with your art.

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😶

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Ok just throwing a couple ideas out there.

First off I love the composition and think this will be a great set up for future books and keep them all feeling consistent yet separate which is great.

I like Wendell’s expression the kind of what did I just get myself into expression. Feels very fitting for the first book.

As far as a changing material that could change between books you might consider maybe even integrating that into the vines or wood thing you have for instance when you get to trench wars focused. Books you could change it to a more industrial like maybe even change the shape to square if your feeling crazy.

As far as this one goes. You could always make the Vallen silhouette more imposing but I would keep the waist a similar size to keep that nice triangular composition you have. Also color will add a lot to drawing the eye. All I can say for that is keep complimentary colors in mind and also the 80-20 rule.

This is really good though. I love where this is going.

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Thanks, Joseph. Yeah, this is just my rough idea to start with...thought it might help to let you all have a look at how I make the art. Maybe it would spark a thought or idea...

As for "changing material that could change between books you might consider maybe even integrating that into the vines or wood thing you have for instance when you get to trench wars focused. Books you could change it to a more industrial like maybe even change the shape to square if your feeling crazy."....I LOVE this.

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