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YT wouldn't let me leave comments, so I'll put them here. Love it! Great concept, great execution (as always!). My suggestions: make Mahan break out of the oval frame even more. Get that right shoulder way out, or stretch that arm to give it a little more urgency. Also, I'd drop the suggestion of a smile or mouth at all, just to see if that makes him a bit more otherworld-creepy. I like the vines idea to help with the framing.

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Jaime Buckley 💎's avatar

I did mention in the video and in the description that you cannot leave comments on YT-- ONLY here--so I have them all in one place. =)

That's not Mahan, BUT you bringing my main bad guy up makes me stop and consider! THANK you for that.

Love the 3D angle suggestions...and just FYI -- this was just a simple idea, so I could draw SOMEthing to show. Wendell, of course, has to be there, but my first thought was to have him turning to look AT the threat.

Agree and love also the urgency feel -- I do think it's critical to create the danger and stress of the moment.

...as for the 'smile'....I wanted to change it into a snarl...unless I can get the whole feel from the eyes themselves.

I'm struggling with the vines...because I want to create signs, symbols, maybe even easter eggs for readers to find,...or, aha -- maybe a cypher-- to find hidden parts within the storyline itself?

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Oh, the cypher idea is sweeeet!!!!

I like the idea of him turning to look at the threat, but then we might not get as good an angle on his face, and I feel like the MC's face should be the focal point, no?

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Jaime Buckley 💎's avatar

I agree -- Wendell should be the focal point.

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